Revision Plan The goal of my revision is to make sure that my claims and other sentences make sense. My peers have pointed out that many of my thought begin to wander as another pops into my head. I would also like to put additional information in my essay to help make it even stronger. … [Read more…]
Idea comment- The idea comment I made was on Nicole’s essay. My comment said, “Maybe add something about how it helps people express themselves.” This is an idea comment because it is giving her advice on things to add to her essay to make it stronger. Evidence Comment- The evidence comment I made was on … [Read more…]
I liked reading other people’s intros because it opened my eyes to other peoples views and ideas. I also liked reading them because it helped me figure out ways to word my own opinion better. I wanted to give some feed back on the person I complimented because I noticed some small things that would … [Read more…]
In “How Painting can Transform Communities,” a TED talk by Jeroen Koolhaas and Dre Urhahn, they spoke about how they believed in the power of a finished house and some paint can help a struggling community. Haas and Hahn started their journey in Rio to make a documentary. After making the documentary they decided to … [Read more…]
First I’ll give the definition of the word I was given at the end of class. I was given the word ‘altruist’, altruist is a person that is unselfishly concerned for or devoted to the welfare of others (found on dictionary.com). After rereading Southan’s essay, “Is Art a Waste of Time” I feel as though I … [Read more…]
My first response to the reading is found of page 435 (pretty sure), in the last paragraphs. The reading says, “Does your preferred good deed make as much of a difference as simply handing over the money? If not, how good a deed is it really?” This quote makes me think that the needy are … [Read more…]
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