Yo-Yo Ma’s essay, “Necessary Edges: Arts, Empathy, and Education” was originally published online. I was published on a website called the WorldPost, which is an online news and blog site. The authors bio identifies him as a very successful cellist and songwriter. It goes on to say where he attended school and what other people … [Read more…]
So to further support my thesis I added another paragraph that contains a quote. New Paragraph: Another aspect that Haas and Hahns could add to their mission is to bring awareness. If they’re already getting media attention, why not bring more? While Haas and Hahn are trying to make these communities beautiful, they’re playing … [Read more…]
Conclusion Paragraph #1: In all, I think that you could argue either sides but I don’t think I, personally, would not like to live in a world where art didn’t exist. I think that art, whether its a painting, music, photographs, film, dance, or poetry, is vital for the sanity of the human race. Without … [Read more…]
Revision Plan The goal of my revision is to make sure that my claims and other sentences make sense. My peers have pointed out that many of my thought begin to wander as another pops into my head. I would also like to put additional information in my essay to help make it even stronger. … [Read more…]
Idea comment- The idea comment I made was on Nicole’s essay. My comment said, “Maybe add something about how it helps people express themselves.” This is an idea comment because it is giving her advice on things to add to her essay to make it stronger. Evidence Comment- The evidence comment I made was on … [Read more…]
I liked reading other people’s intros because it opened my eyes to other peoples views and ideas. I also liked reading them because it helped me figure out ways to word my own opinion better. I wanted to give some feed back on the person I complimented because I noticed some small things that would … [Read more…]
In “How Painting can Transform Communities,” a TED talk by Jeroen Koolhaas and Dre Urhahn, they spoke about how they believed in the power of a finished house and some paint can help a struggling community. Haas and Hahn started their journey in Rio to make a documentary. After making the documentary they decided to … [Read more…]
