Blog Post #15

Revision Plan:

I want to go back to my paper and figure out a better argument/thesis. I was really struggling how to incorporate everything I wanted to talk about in a way that made sense. I plan to go back to the basics, make a thesis statement, plan out the topics of my paper and make sure that they all make sense when I put them together. I plan to go to digi-space sometime this week just to check it out because I’m not really sure what or how they can help since the electronic and multi-model pieces aren’t what I need help with.

1. My goal for my revision is to clearly articulate my belief/argument. I want to reorganize my paper and make sure that I can incorporate everything I want to so that it will make sense to the reader.
2. First I’m going to state my thesis. Then I’m going to come up with three topic sentences for at least three body paragraphs and if I find that I have another idea I will create a topic sentence for it as well. After I have come up with clear topic sentences I will go back to my first draft and add any of the text that I like to one of the new body paragraphs if it fits in with my argument. Once I have finished that I will structure my introduction paragraph and conclusion in a way that makes sense to everyone.
3. My biggest challenge is going to be incorporating everything I want to talk about but making sure that it’s all relevant to each other.
4. If I have a challenge that I can’t fix on my own I will ask my roommates for help or go to SASC or I will email you with a question.