Blog post #16

My favorite revision strategies I learned this semester in English 110 is the peer review and revising their comments afterwards, if I agree with it. I didn’t really like any of the other revision strategies because they seem to complicate the paper too much, making a paragraph seem like a math equation. For example, I … [Read more…]

Blog Post #15

Revision Plan: I want to go back to my paper and figure out a better argument/thesis. I was really struggling how to incorporate everything I wanted to talk about in a way that made sense. I plan to go back to the basics, make a thesis statement, plan out the topics of my paper and … [Read more…]

Blog Post #14

Some media that I plan to use are songs or voices that I think are beautiful, photos, paintings, or drawings about landscapes that I find beautiful, and many other things that I think hold beauty. Outline: Intro – I think that beauty is a personal preference and that someone can see beauty in anything. -Introduce … [Read more…]

Blog Post #13

“To regard beauty as a luxury adornment or a social signifier was to miss the true potential of the experience.” I think that this statement is very interesting. It’s saying that people should look beyond the price tag or that a price tag shouldn’t be the reason why a piece of art work of any … [Read more…]

Blog Post #12

When listening to my classmates presentations, the two that stood out to me were Liv’s essay about her friend that has cancer and the other presentation that stood out was Julia’s presentation about the lobsters in Plymouth, Mass. What stood out to me and what I liked about Liv’s presentation was the fact that it … [Read more…]

Blog Post #11

At first I thought this assignment was going to be really hard to find all of the transitions, pointing words and repeating key words and phrases. But since there is the command f it made it a lot easier to do. I have a lot of transitions but I think they’re all needed because there … [Read more…]

Blog Post #10

Lehrer’s main argument is that science needs the arts. Science needs the arts because it enables researchers to expend their understand of whatever they’re studying beyond the scientific process of objectivity, experiments, and facts. None of the information gained from these methods is our actual reality, meaning that the researchers will never have all of … [Read more…]

Blog Post #9

Yo-Yo Ma’s essay, “Necessary Edges: Arts, Empathy, and Education” was originally published online. I was published on a website called the WorldPost, which is an online news and blog site. The authors bio identifies him as a very successful cellist and songwriter. It goes on to say where he attended school and what other people … [Read more…]

Blog Post #8

So to further support my thesis I added another paragraph that contains a quote. New Paragraph:    Another aspect that Haas and Hahns could add to their mission is to bring awareness. If they’re already getting media attention, why not bring more? While Haas and Hahn are trying to make these communities beautiful, they’re playing … [Read more…]

Blog Post #7

Conclusion Paragraph #1: In all, I think that you could argue either sides but I don’t think I, personally, would not like to live in a world where art didn’t exist. I think that art, whether its a painting, music, photographs, film, dance, or poetry, is vital for the sanity of the human race. Without … [Read more…]